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很多學(xué)生在練習(xí)英文作文時(shí)，認(rèn)為長(zhǎng)句、難句或復(fù)雜句能夠提升文章的語(yǔ)言質(zhì)量，展示自己“深厚”的語(yǔ)言功底，并因此獲得更高的分?jǐn)?shù)。他們?cè)趥淇紡?fù)習(xí)時(shí)也花了很多精力在長(zhǎng)句的練習(xí)上，考試時(shí)也會(huì)盡量使用長(zhǎng)句。這種想法確實(shí)有一定的道理，因?yàn)楹芏嗫荚嚾缧峦懈５膶懽骺颇吭u(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中確實(shí)有從語(yǔ)法或用詞的多樣性等角度考察語(yǔ)言質(zhì)量的評(píng)分項(xiàng)目，考生如果能夠熟練地運(yùn)用各種句式寫出精彩的長(zhǎng)句，確實(shí)能給文章增色不少。
然而，朗閣雅思專家認(rèn)為：一味地追求句子的長(zhǎng)度有時(shí)反而會(huì)犧牲句子的“可讀性”，特別是對(duì)一些基礎(chǔ)一般的學(xué)生來(lái)說(shuō)，有時(shí)生硬地追求長(zhǎng)句反而破壞了句子的句法準(zhǔn)確性。下面我們就來(lái)看一些例子，體會(huì)一些寫得并不成功的長(zhǎng)句和如何修改的建議：
建議一：避免空洞的單詞和詞組
1. 一些空洞的單詞或詞組根本不能為句子帶來(lái)任何相關(guān)的或重要的信息，完全可以被刪掉。比如下面的句子：
When all things are considered, young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion.
這句話當(dāng)中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion”都顯得多余。完全可以去掉。改為：
Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.
2. 有些空洞和繁瑣的表達(dá)方式可以進(jìn)行替換，例如：
Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time.
“due to the fact that”就是一個(gè)很典型的繁瑣的表達(dá)方式的例子，可以替換，簡(jiǎn)化為下面的表達(dá)方式：
Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now.
建議二： 避免重復(fù)
1. 盡量避免重復(fù)使用同樣的詞匯?；蛘哂械臅r(shí)候雖然詞匯沒(méi)有重復(fù)，但意思卻有重復(fù)。這時(shí)候可以做一些簡(jiǎn)化的工作。例如下面這個(gè)例子：
The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size.
large 對(duì)一個(gè)farm來(lái)說(shuō)就是size方面的large，所以in size可以去掉，改為：
The farm my grandfather grew up on was large.
更簡(jiǎn)潔的表達(dá)方式為：
My grandfather grew up on a large farm.
2. 有時(shí)一個(gè)詞組可以用一個(gè)更簡(jiǎn)單的單詞來(lái)替換，例如：
My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm.
這里的over and over again就可以改為repeatedly，顯得更為簡(jiǎn)潔：
My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm.
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